Hey MH, I always like how honest your images are. These two are no exception.
Normally I'm a big fan of shallow DOF, but in #2 I'm feeling like it's too shallow. The crop has her very high in the image, cutting off some of the top of her head that would have been in focus, in favor of a large area of her chest which is totally out of focus. Now, I'm definitely not complaining about including the chest in the image! To my eye the shallowness (is that a word?) disassociates her face from the rest of her.
In #1, you still have a very shallow DOF, but her left shoulder and torso are largely in focus, and only her right shoulder is out. Totally different story here - her head is associated with the rest of her. Nice. A little more light (maybe a closer bounce card) on her left cheek might be nice.