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Jamille #2 (SN)
Old 05-04-2005, 05:15 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Here's my second post from my session with Jamille yesterday. This is one of my favorites so far.

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Old 05-04-2005, 05:19 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Much better than the first photo. I like it.
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Old 05-04-2005, 05:42 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I like this one too....Wonder how it would look with more Draping of the sheet..make it kind of Flowing....
Don. sorry I dont have a flowing sheet image! lol.
 
 
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Old 05-04-2005, 06:24 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Expression and eye contact much better. No sheet winding off into infinity. Both good.

However, the model looks like an afterthought. Or perhaps it's better to say she looks like she's falling out of the picture. She's on the far left and her body is on a left diagonal out of the image. This sort of thing is something Rolando talked about when we were reviewing portfolios, although we didn't see one of just this sort. This looks like a picture of a bed that happens to have a person on part of it as opposed to a picture of a woman on a bed.

If she were facing and had her body oriented to camera right, it would be okay (or at least better) that she's so far to camera left. Otherwise, for this same pose, I'd like her on the other side of the middle of the image.

By the highly advanced theoretical visionary technique of holding my hand up and blocking out part of the image, I determined that I immediately like it better just by cropping off the image slightly to camera right of her elbow. [img]/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img] I still don't like it as well as I want to, though, because she's projecting out of the image. This is another thing Rolando talked about - minimizing the plane of the model. (Not going into details, go to the workshop so Rolando doesn't accuse me of giving away the store. [img]/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img] )

It's not a bad picture, really it isn't. But it needs so little change to make it a *good* picture that I'm impelled to blather about it. [img]/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img]

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Old 05-04-2005, 11:31 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Shouldn't have cut the iron frame. Also, try to go for more subtle light. Good expression and body language of the model, though....
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Old 05-05-2005, 10:30 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Thanks!
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Old 05-05-2005, 10:32 AM   #7 (permalink)
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This one will do in lieu of a flowing sheet example. Nice image.

Thanks for the comment. I think I'm getting better, but I have a long way to go. I'm stoked that I got a chance to work with Jamille this week.
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Old 05-05-2005, 10:35 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Great comments. Keep on blathering.

I get your point about the model flowing out of the image. I jumped on this one as a quick idea while we were shooting. I was hoping it would look inviting with the space open next to her on the bed. But now that you mention it, your comment opens up some new steps for me to take.

Man, I can't wait for the DVD to arrive! That should help some more as well.
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Old 05-05-2005, 10:39 AM   #9 (permalink)
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Good point about the frame.

I liked the lighting but I agree some more subtle light would look better. I want to try the same thing again and use the light to supplement the window light. One stuggle I had with that was the one light I was using was set to its lowest power.

Any suggestions on how to be more subtle with it?
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Old 05-05-2005, 11:02 AM   #10 (permalink)
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Ah, now you're trying to tell a *story,* or at least communicate an idea more involved than "Pretty girl in bed." (Not that that story isn't a classic.) For that we need more visual cues. An empty space can be an invitation, a challenge, a warning, or just an oversight. (If it's my picture, bet on #4.)

Have a look at this:



Now, this image has problems, but I think it's right on topic for this concept. Here we have some empty seat space next to the model. This keeps her from being centered, which is why I was shooting from this angle, but her hand placed on the couch beside her, and her inquisitive look, communicates to the viewer. (At least if I'm the viewer, it does. Your mileage may vary.) "Would you like to sit down?" is the idea I get. ("Yes, yes I would," is the appropriate answer.)

To make the idea even more explicit, I should have moved the frame even more to camera right and showed the entire "landing area" where the hypothetical viewer would sit, and the model could have used a bit more implication in her expression, perhaps a faint but welcoming smile.

Once you start doing concepts like this, the model becomes an actress and the photographer a director, shooting a movie that's 1/100th of a second long. That's not a lot of time to get an idea across, so you have to communicate it strongly. Not that you can't be subtle - an unsubtle way to do this would have been to have had the model "patting" the seat and crooking a finger on her other hand in the classic "come here" gesture, perhaps even with an exaggerated wink. But if you have a clear idea to communicate, you must communicate it clearly. (Ambiguity is in the advanced class.)

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