This is a cute idea but I don't like the sheet being folded and then going clear out of the frame. It's too contrived, it makes it too obvious that this was a set up and posed situation. All our images, or at least most of them, are in fact set up and posed, of course, but there's still that little veil of "could have happened, could be, could be" that has to fall over a shot in a bedroom like this. Also, I would have done something to make the objects visible in the mirror a little less visually chaotic. Assuming I had noticed them. Which I probably wouldn't have. Isn't hindsight wonderful?
The model could be looking at the camera a little more directly, or a little less. Right now she's sort of looking dazed. Her feet are obscured and not in a good way by the sheet, I'd have either covered one of them or brought them out.
I like the composition for this scene, with the exception of the sheet, this is a good use of what looks like a pre-existing bedroom setup. The model looks like she could be really cute with a little more expression. I'd say you're doing all right and should keep getting better. [img]/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img]