Jocelyn

[NavajoCoast]

Comments are welcomed.

[dynamike]

Dana,

Good to see you posting. I like it. The only things I have fault in it is left hand coming out of nowhere and the strand of hair across the forehead. Great to see you hooked up with Jocelyn.

Mike

[jtsmith]

Dana,

I think the hair is too "matted" coming down the right side of her face. If you take that hair mass and have her pull it around back or back behind her ear and still let the other hair flow naturally... then I think it would be better. I like the S pattern you have as you know I like the S composition but the left hand curving upwards takes my eyes up and out of the frame and especially since the overhead light, highlights it. Because of that it doesn't hold me in the image.

[StMarc]

Although also, to me her hip looks a bit *too* far swung out - she doesn't look natural to my eyes. However, that's a purely individual judgment. The lighting and the framing are excellent.

M

[isaiahbrink]

A few comments. #1 - great composition. #2 - great model #3 - great lighting. #4 - I would of liked to see her look towards the camera and leave everything else alone.

Isaiah Brink