please feel free to pick apart as you see fit, i'm learning a lot from this site
Okay, but please remember that these are just my personal opinions.
First pic. I like the styling. I see it more as an editorial picture of a young person asserting herself, rather than as glamour. Personally I would have shot from a slightly lower angle to make the model appear a little more assertive still. Maybe experiment with a wider angle lens.
Second pic. The rock behind her right shoulder keeps drawing my eye. I think it needs a much shallower depth of field to put the rock out of focus. You could quite easily achieve this effect with a little bit of background blurring in Photoshop.
Don't be put off by the comments, I do like both pictures, and you did ask.
Rule 10 picture (Is there still a rule 10?