I am going to be brutal....this is NOT a personal slam.
It looks like the eyes are soft.
I will start with her right shoulder... looks weird the way the shirt is all together.
Looks like you just stood over her and shot down at a weird angle. Popped the camera flash on and shot. Her head looks distorted with the angle and choice of lens.
Looks like buckwheat with the hair going on. She's pretty symetrical too and I know she's pretty.
Black hair on black usually needs seperation. In this case she is laying on it.
I don't see a purpose to be quite honest. I don't see any thought to it.
Her neck where it creases on image left is not flattering.
Roger, to be blunt. Just way too many distractions to be considered anything of value. I want you to think about your next shoot and don't just shoot to be shooting a pretty girl. Shoot to get an image that has value. Look at your work and look at others that you admire and try and get better instead of hoping to get better. Keep posting, keep on shooting and I certainly am not trying to discourage you from doing so. Just the opposite. Get fire under you and do it.
I will take my meds now and be better in the morning...[img]/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/grin.gif[/img]